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  1. msg Comments Neighbours message posted Comments Neighbours cinbarnsley Neighbours comments This is an in-depth investigation that includes a range of interes…
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    This is an in-depth investigation that includes a range of interesting facts about Vietnam's neighbours and their geography, history, political makeup and culture. You have covered considerable detail from the various nations in the region. Your questions are thoughtful and you have provided a solid background to this topic. It would have been good if you had explained in greater detail the connections between the countries, as you did with China and Vietnam. It is notable that each nation has a sizeable Buddhist population and has been greatly influenced by Confucianism and Communism (Laos, China and Cambodia). It is interesting that Laos has had a "skyrocketing" population in the past few years. I wonder why that is? Overall, this is a solid research project. I really enjoyed reading it and hope that it provided you with a greater understanding of these countries, which are also our neighbours. Well done.

    Mark: 80%
    Grade: B
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  4. msg Comments message posted Comments This piece of work began well by explaining the historical background of art in Vietnam. The presen…
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    This piece of work began well by explaining the historical background of art in Vietnam. The presentation is effective and engaging. However, given the time you had to complete this project the information is basic and lacks the detail required to provide us with a comprehensive insight into the role of art in Vietnamese society and how it reflects aspects of life and culture in Vietnam.

    Mark: 60
    Grade: C
    3:48 pm
  5. msg Comment message posted Comment You have discussed some interesting points regarding population in Vietnam but this is a basic piec…
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    You have discussed some interesting points regarding population in Vietnam but this is a basic piece of research. It is important that you the statistics you have provided so that you provide your readers with a more detailed insight into the changes in population and how these reflect other social and economic changes. You also needed to find or make some graphs, photographs or video that helped you to explain this topic to others in the class. You can do much better than this.

    Mark: 60%
    Grade: C
    3:46 pm
  6. msg Comments message posted Comments You have raised some interesting points in this piece of research, Toby. Your presentation is appea…
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    You have raised some interesting points in this piece of research, Toby. Your presentation is appealing and you have used multimedia elements effectively. However, in some aspects the information provided is basic and you could have provided more detail about the the course of the war, its causes and the consequences for Vietnam and other nations involved.

    Mark:75%
    Grade: B
    3:43 pm
  7. msg Comments Ms message posted Comments Ms This wiki contains in-depth research and a close examination of the course of the First Indochina W…
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    This wiki contains in-depth research and a close examination of the course of the First Indochina War. You have put a considerable amount of effort into the construction of this topic and present a comprehensive overview of a range of issues, events and personalities. You could have included more analysis at the end of your document as your discussion of the effects of the First Indochina War is relatively brief. You could have discussed the causes of the war and its role in bringing about the Second Indochina War between Vietnam and its allies and the US and its allies, what we now call the Vietnam War. Your use of evidence was good and you have presented your research in an appealing way.
    A very capable piece of work, well done.
    Mark: 85%
    Grade: A-
    3:40 pm
  8. msg Flora and fauna message posted Flora and fauna This page had some excellent information and was interesting to read. However, it is far too short.…
    Flora and fauna
    This page had some excellent information and was interesting to read. However, it is far too short. You needed to include more detail on the range of flora and fauna that can be found in Vietnam and perhaps you could have spent more time discussing the threats to wildlife and native habitat and what is being done about this. You have the beginnings of a quality site here but you needed to add more detail. Your peers have added some excellent tips in the discussion section that would have helped you to "beef up" your site. A good start but is this really the best you can do?

    Mark: 60%
    Grade: C
    5:21 am
  9. msg Climate comments message posted Climate comments This had the potential to be a reasonable project but you have not included enough information. It …
    Climate comments
    This had the potential to be a reasonable project but you have not included enough information. It is far too basic and would have been strengthened by the inclusion of more detailed data. Another way that you could have improved the research was to make connections between the climate and life in Vietnam. For example, you could have discussed how the climate affects agriculture production in different regions. The layout of your page is well done but you have let yourselves down by the lack of detailed information.

    Mark: 50%
    Grade: C-
    5:13 am
  10. msg Resources message posted Resources This report has some very relevant information but it lacks a coherent structure and this undermine…
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    This report has some very relevant information but it lacks a coherent structure and this undermines the good work you have done. The lack of structure makes it hard to follow and you need to organise your ideas in a more coherent way. You also needed to provide some maps, photographs or video to complement the written information you have gathered. This reads as though it is a half-finished project and it is important that you see your research through to the end. Remember, the aim of this project was that you would provide information for others to learn about your chosen topic. However, you have made this difficult because your writing is hard to follow.

    Mark: 60%
    Grade: C
    5:08 am

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